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王静丽  2009年07月26日 星期日 23:56 | 4244次浏览 | 20条评论

TOPIC: ISSUE76 - "Truly profound thinkers and highly creative artists are always out of step with their time and their society."

TOPIC: ISSUE76 - "Truly profound thinkers and highly creative artists are always out of step with their time and their society."

WORDS: 708           TIME: 00:45:00           DATE: 2009/7/26 17:02:53

 

It may be, in the old times, true that many truly profound thinkers and highly creative artists are always out of step with their time and their society, such as Galileo , Vincent Van Groh . However, not all of them are out of step with the time, such as Newton, Curie. Fu r thermore, we are in the age of high technology and information leading to being known very easier than any time of the human history, and profound thinkers and highly creative artists are easier (not more easy) to catch up with the time if they want to.

 

There really are plenty of profound thinkers and highly creative artists out of the step of their time. Often, the reasons why they cannot catch up with their times are various, such as the status of them making they do not have the power to make their words heard, their characteristics may also prevent them from the whole public. For example, they may be shy and not easy to get on well with, or often speak words which may harm others. Take the famous writer, Tolstoy , as an example, he is really having ability and deep thoughts, and also writes plenty of famous books. However, he is very self-behaved, and does not want to stay with others, even with his wife and children, and finally, he cannot stand the pressure of staying with the members of his family he chooses to get away out of home. In addition, there are many great people like that. Thus, they are easily out of the step of their time and their society, just as one ph i losopher has said " ( 没有空格!!! ) The talent people are always different from and far from us ordinary people".  

 

Otherwise, not all of the great minds are choosing to get out of the step with their time and their society, such as Curie and Newton. Let me tell the details of them in turns, first is the great scientist, who is the first woman to win the Noble Prize, and also the first women professor to go to the stage of the Paris Science Centre. She is very silent and easy to get on well with, and when her husband unluckily/unfortunately passed away, many people are willing to help her. Also, her good characteristics have given her great presentation in her career and two good daughters. And so as to Newton, who has the similar experience with Curie. When he is very young, he has been the leader of Science Centre of the whole country. Not only he gets a lot of achievements , but also he helps a lot of the new to get many achievements. Thus, they are many truly profound thinkers and highly creative artists being known as the great ones of the nation, or even the whole world. In fact, many of them have make contributions to the world to walk forward or even run forward at a high speed.

 

What is more, we are in a very different age, in which the high technolo g y has made information communication so easily. Nowadays, the telephone, the television, or the Internet, have make it is so easier to get a fame, which is totally different from the old days, in which if you do not have the power to make your words heard, even though your ideas or inventions are truly great and meaningful. In fact, in modern times , if you want to be famous or be approved by the public, you do not have to worry the expenses, only if you have the true talent. Certainly, some people, who are the truly profound thinkers and highly creative artists, however, hate to be famous, and only like the feelings of no disturbing, must be ruled out.

 

In conclusion, not all of the great thinkers and highly creative artists are out the step with their time and their society. In old days, the great people more easily to be out of the time and the society, mainly because of the society reasons or the personal characteristics. Nowadays, with the high development of technology, and new information tool being invented at a fast speed, it is becoming so easy to get a famous, certainly the base is that the one wants and really has the true ability.

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邓楠

回复 邓楠  2009年07月28日 星期二 11:21

GRE... 我GRE的分数实在都不好意思拿出来见人了。(我现在80%的GRE单词似乎都不认识了……)不过要是需要帮忙,我会尽力。

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  • 王静丽

    回复 王静丽  2009年07月28日 星期二 22:52

    谢谢
    没想到这边有这么多同学考G
    还帮我改作文

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  • 夏清然

    回复 夏清然  2009年07月28日 星期二 11:24

    分数够用就成了,在这个BT考试上浪费时间不值得。
    BTW,另外我的G考已经超5年过期了...

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      • 邓楠

        回复 邓楠  2009年07月28日 星期二 11:28

        其实准确说来呢……我的GRE分数确实不够用……连一般学校的要求都没达到。给我作咨询的咨询师说,要是GRE稍微高点,我应该能申请到更好些的。这次能有学校要,让我感觉美国人民其实还是挺友好的。
        无所谓了,清然还要考G吗?我到那边估计还得再考一次,申博士用

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          • 夏清然

            回复 夏清然  2009年07月28日 星期二 11:32

            当时我的分数也刚刚够,唯一还有点小自豪的是作文搞了4.5分。
            对了,你不是直接申请的PhD么?
            我的下次G考么,想想再说,确实太自虐~

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              • 邓楠

                回复 邓楠  2009年07月28日 星期二 12:16

                4.5还是很牛的。
                当时拿到GRE的分数之后,感觉这次即便申请到,也不会有太满意的结果,所以都改申master了。打算到那边再申请phD。
                唉~我到那边还得再自虐一会。现在还没看单词呢。

                那啥……跟人家博客里头聊上天了……那我随便说说这篇issue吧。本人aw才3.5,一定不要以我的评论作为参考。我就是瞎说几句。

                看了开头的句子: It may be, in the old times... 我以为文章的大概思路是: 以前的思想家都超越了他的时代和社会, 而现在的思想家, 普遍都会和时代步调一致. 但是从后面的讨论以及例子可以看出, 并没有以时代不同作为区分思想家/艺术家是否超越他的时代.

                这样的话, 第一句可以加一个especially: It may be, especially in the old times... 这样读者就不会觉得是将时代的先后作为对立的条件. 不过感觉后面还是没有涉及到太多与时代相关的内容. 倒是可以稍微强调一下时代的条件. 比如居里夫人就是近代的.(我觉得如果是按照时间先后顺序陈述例子的话, 可以把居里夫人放在牛顿的后面)

                随便说的几句, 切不可作为参考. 另外, 要是说考托福, 我倒是有个小秘籍.

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Zhenhua Wu

回复 Zhenhua Wu  2009年07月27日 星期一 14:38

语法错误一定要少。

may harm others....may be harm to others

he is really having ability and deep thoughts, .. he really has deep thoughts...

who is the first woman to win the Noble Prize... who is the first woman won the Nobel prize...


have make it... have been making it so easy to get a fame... 这句话你想说什么,没太明白。。

the great people more easily to be out of the time and the society, mainly because of the society reasons or the personal characteristics. 这句话没动词

information tool 。。。 information tools

it is becoming so easy to get a famous, 。。。。 it is becoming so easy to get famous,

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Zhenhua Wu

回复 Zhenhua Wu  2009年07月27日 星期一 14:38

一点建议,issue的关键在于把问题说清楚,保证这个后,再注意语句的修饰。

头一句 I suggest use
It may be true,, in the old times, that ... 原句语法没错,但读起来不顺。

...we are in the age of high technology and information leading to being known very easier than any time of the human history, .... “and”后面这个短句好像少动词,不要very easier吧, 就easier。



...and profound thinkers and highly creative artists are easier (not more easy) ...有比较级(easier)通常要和more同时出现吧

There really are plenty。。。 There are planty of 。。。


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  • 王静丽

    回复 王静丽  2009年07月27日 星期一 23:16

    太谢谢了!!!

    每次总是开始用软件练习的时候
    就开始啪啪啪的打字
    没想好就写
    总害怕字数不够


    现在手忙脚乱了
    不知道先忙哪里了

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  • 夏清然

    回复 夏清然  2009年07月27日 星期一 14:51

    出手不凡,一看就是高手!顶!

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马越

回复 马越  2009年07月27日 星期一 11:13

到底要在哪方面修改,可以说得具体一点吗?

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夏清然

回复 夏清然  2009年07月27日 星期一 10:50

看来是在准备GRE的作文。

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徐继哲

回复 徐继哲  2009年07月27日 星期一 08:42

振华和邓楠可以帮忙看看静丽的作文。呵呵。

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